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New Medicine


A stem cell research company has been researching a cure for a disease. They have recently put off the research because they have decided to ship a medicine that instead mitigates the disease’s effects.

What is your opinion on this?

“What is your opinion on this matter?”

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  1. If you were badly hurt by something, and wanted a cure for it, how would you get that cure? I bet you’ll go to the doctor nearby and have it checked out there. Let’s suppose the doctor randomly decides he has no cure for it, but wants to mitigate the wound. How would you feel? I would feel very disappointed. I wanted the cure for my wound, but he gave something that just makes it better a little bit. A stem research company has been researching a cure for a disease, but they decide to call it off and ship a medicine that mitigates the disease. People would feel ripped off like me, and they would stop trusting the company. If they don’t have the complete cure for something, the stem company should just have the whole project called off.

    If a person has a very bad disease, and they want something that will fully cure it, they’ll pay up to full extent if there is no other option. Let’s say the price ranges from $950 to $2,000, and you pay the doctors and specialists that amount. Suddenly, they come back later and say that there is no full medicine or cure for the disease, but there is a medicine that will change or fix the disease a little bit. I, personally, would be fired up and angry. I didn’t just pay 1/5 my salary for a cure to my disease to doctors coming back and saying that there is no medicine for it, just some lousy pill that makes a small change. People all around the world would stop trusting that organization.

    Also, if the stem cell research company doesn’t have the total cure for the disease, why don’t they just have the project called off? It’s better than ripping people off and telling them they have to pay $2,000 for something that does little change, or no change at all. Let’s say if you DO accept that offer. It will still effect you, believe it or not, because the disease will cause problems for you later on. If people are relying on you for something major, why can’t you try your hardest and do that task? You’ll feel complete and accomplished, and you will get a standing ovation. If the research company doesn’t have the full medicine for the disease, they just discard that idea.

    As you can see, the stem organization should just scratch the task of a medicine that just mitigates the disease. People would feel that they have been tricked, and they’ll want their money back. The whole world is relying on their findings, and the company just makes a small change. If I were working in the research, I would work harder to complete the task of full recovery of the disease, and make myself heard to people all around the planet.

  2. Medicine is a ground-breaking discovery that has changed the face of the Earth today. From just the simplest medical kit from the 9th century to the MRI machines used today, there is no doubt that medicine is a hopeful to start to healing the patients of the world. If a stem cell research company was researching a cure for a disease and decide to stop the research and send out a prototype that mitigates the disease, it proves that careful steps will be taken to ensure the safety of future invalids who will consider this treatment. While finding the cure for a disease is one of the most exciting things in medical science, knowing the safety of the patient is more important and how effective it is on the disease should be one of the top priorities of the company.

    The most important thing that is asked about a treatment is the phrase, “Is it safe?” Family members of the patient want to be reassured and confident about the treatment that their child is taking. Just knowing that it has been tested before and has a substantial survivor rate is enough to make parents consider it. However, if a serum that has reached the medical market has not been tested in smaller doses on patients, the opinion on the treatment would be hesitant as no one would want to risk their child’s life for an untested pill. By having a medicine that mitigates a disease’s symptoms, it will be more safe. For instance, cancer is a disease that uses powerful treatments such as chemotherapy and radiation to target cancer cells. This is an option that doesn’t guarantee being completely cured and only mitigates the cancer’s effect, yet many people choose this option to cure their family members.

    In addition to this, by sending out a medicine that mitigates the effects to different hospitals, the scientists on the project can study the effects the medicine has on the patient’s body. This will allow them to know which stem cells they should create when making their next batch of stem cells. Also, the scientists would be able to learn more about how the disease works, such as how fast the disease progresses through the body and how the medicine prevents it from spreading. A smaller prototype like this can be used as a platform for improvement. By carefully tracking the progress of the medicine and the disease, the scientists can take logical steps toward not only improving the effect of the medicine, but saving lives as well.

    Furthermore, improvement is necessary to guaranteeing that the prototype created will become an accepted cure for a disease. Never in history has a perfect product been created on the first try. With the results obtained by studying the medicine, scientists can use this knowledge to figure out their next steps in improving the safety and effectiveness on the invalid. While it may take a lot of time, (stem cells take an extensive amount of labor to create) the final product will ensure that more people will be freed from their hospital beds instead of coming back again when the disease has reappeared.

    Moreover, the research company made a good decision to put of f the research for a cure by sending out a medicine to mitigate a disease’s effects. This is because it allows them to the the prototype’s safety,c collect date on how the disease works, and improve upon their prototype. Although one might argue that there is no time to waste saving patients nearing the end, careful actions to ensure that a medicine is safe, will save more lives than a medicine that is rashly made.

    1. Well formed essay. You make a good case and I particularly like your conclusion. It is kind of interesting that you chose to believe the company made the decision based on safety and similar concerns. The prompt does not say that. In fact, it leaves all options open. Perhaps the company did it to make money. In fact, even following the logic in your argument, I still wonder why the company has to put off the research for the cure. Why are they mutually exclusive? Are they not letting people die while they make them feel better in the last days at a very high cost to the ill?

  3. Imagine having stage 4 cancer, with little hope of survival. Surely there would be a cure through intensive research, but that is not the case. There have been many breakthroughs in medical science, so shipping a medicine meant to alleviate the pain, instead of a cure is crude. In this case if the stem cell research company decided it was better to stop the research: it would waste millions of dollars and funding, many people going through these diseases depending on cure would be devastated, and could potentially ruin the reputation of the company.

    The U.S government and many other campaigns have raised money for these research companies to benefit those in need. If the research did stop in stem cell research companies, it would waste valuable resources. After all, a medicine will do little to please people who are ill, so cancelling the project could put people with certain diseases in danger. It would be the equivalent to NASA and Spacex shutting down space exploration because they decided it was a waste of time. As a result, that is why stopping research on a cure, is a waste of human resources and a timewaster.

    There are millions who suffer with cancer throughout the world, so it is not surprising that some of the people going through this would be devastated, that the research would stop. Having all these people praising a company for their development in a cure, would give the person a great reputation for the rest of their lives. If the company fails to continue on this vow, it would be a situation of rage and despair. The chances of living through cancer is very slim at just 60 percent overall and not just cancer, but other diseases often have a low life-expectancy for the people who have them. Overall, diseases in general have an adverse effect on humans, so a discontinuation of research would leave many unhappy.

    Lastly, if a stem cell research company shut down research it would tarnish their reputation. This is because of both critics and the amount of effort given to find a cure. Although it might not permanently damage the company people will remember them for this. After all, just giving up will not do any good for humans, and promotes laziness rather than a good ethic.

    What can be concluded from this is that if companies that operate in medical or even technological fields, would be downtrodden with complaints from others, if they forget about the research and supply medicine instead. The research would also be a waste of resources and money supplied by themselves and other people would also go to waste. Lastly, stopping the research would lead to backlash and the companies would tarnish their reputation of being reliable. Many people suffer with heart disease, diabetes, high cholesterol, and etc, so it would be only be worth the money to fund these projects, if they find valuable research. In conclusion, that my opinion on what would happen if a stem cell companies abruptly end their research, if they decide to supply drugs instead.

    1. Sai, much better writing style than the examples from earlier. Now focus your message. The intro kind of bounces around and you almost lose the reader by doing that. You can discuss different details and counterpoints later, but for the intro, especially, stick to your main thesis claim and the reasons for that thesis. Laser focus. If you stick to your main idea and the supporting arguments this could be great! I hope you get the message and make the adjustment for tomorrow because if you deliver those goods, then you will be in really good shape. Good luck!

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